写作题目-22年天河区一模

假如你是李华，在学校举办的“我志愿，我服务，我快乐，我成长”的志愿者活动中，你参加了以下多项活动。请根据下图的提示，在班级分享会上谈谈你的经历和感受。

注意：（1）词数80-120个左右（文章开头、结尾已给出，不计入词数，请根据要点提示适当发挥）

（2）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。

Dear classmates,

Good morning, everyone! I am happy to share my experience of working as a volunteer with you.________

写作分析

首先，我们需要确定写作时态。考虑到李华是在分享会上讲述自己的过去经历和感受，用过去时描述经历，用现在时描述感受。

接下来是人称。因为写作的主体是李华本人，所以应该使用第一人称单数，即”I”。

关于短语，我们需要注意谈论自己的经历和感受，所以可以使用以下短语：participate in/take part in, community service, share with, feel, experience, volunteer activity等。

最后是句型。在描述自己的经历时，可以使用一些句型如下：

1、When I participated in the community service activity…
2、At Guangzhou Metro Museum, I was able to experience…
3、During my visit to the nursing home, I had the opportunity to…
4、While volunteering at Children’s Hospital, I was able to…

参考范文一（考场类）：

Dear classmates,

Good morning, everyone! I am happy to share my experience of working as a volunteer with you. I have taken part in many voluntary activities these days and I have learnt a lot.

First of all, I helped sort out waste in our local community this winter holiday. I taught my neighbors to put the rubbish into correct rubbish bins. I think this activity is meaningful because it can make our environment cleaner and better. (1.5) Besides, I volunteered to be a guide in Guangzhou Metro Museum last month. By introducing the history of the metro to the visitors, I not only learnt about the development of our city but also improved my confidence to give a speech in public. (1.5) In addition, I went to the nursing house with my friends every Sunday afternoon. Talking with the old is interesting and it’s our duty to care more about the elderly. (1.5) The most unforgettable experience is visiting a children’s hospital yesterday. I taught some disabled children to sing because I hope music can bring them joy and peace. (1.5) 

This is what I have done as a volunteer and I sincerely expect more and more people can join us to help build a better world. That’s all. Thanks for your listening.

参考范文二（拓展类）：

Dear classmates,
Good morning, everyone! I am happy to share my experience of working as a volunteer with you. In this “I volunteer, I serve, I am happy, and I grow” activity held by our school, I had the privilege of being a volunteer in different places. I’d like to share my experiences with you.

Firstly, I joined a waste sorting activity in the local community. During the activity, we collected recyclables and hazardous waste from households, sorted them and transported them to the designated location. I felt that such an activity not only helped the environment but also educated me more on waste reduction and recycling. I think it is important for each and every one of us to participate in environmental protection.

Secondly, I participated in volunteer work at the Guangzhou Metro Museum. My job was to give a brief introduction to the history, art, and science of metro transportation in Guangzhou. I showed visitors some of the valuable exhibits in the museum and explained the cultural significance of the metro system. It was a great experience for me because I got to learn many new facts about the city’s public transportation and its history.

Thirdly, I visited a nursing home, where I helped with various chores such as cleaning, cooking, and entertaining the elderly. I was surprised to see that the elderly residents were very responsive to our attention and care. They shared their stories with us, listened to us, and showered us with love. I felt a sense of fulfillment in being able to bring joy and comfort to these people.

Lastly, I assisted in the Children’s Hospital by reading to the young patients and playing games with them. I was touched by how optimistic and cheerful the children were despite their illness. I felt that it was our duty to encourage and inspire them to persevere through their suffering. I hope that my presence was able to brighten their day even if by just a little bit.

In conclusion, volunteering has given me the opportunity to serve others, to learn about the community, and most importantly, to grow as a person. I hope that my experiences have inspired all of you to also take part in volunteer work and contribute to society. Thank you for listening.

Mindmap 解析

写作-志愿者活动最先出现在Clarissa Study。

(1) And: 连接两个相似的事物或句子，表示并列。

例句：I went to the store and bought some fruit.

(2) But: 连接两个相反的事物或句子，表示转折。

例句：He is smart but sometimes lazy.

(3) Or: 连接两个相似的事物或句子，表示选择。

例句：Do you want to go to the park or the beach?

(4) So: 连接原因和结果，表示因果关系。

例句：I studied hard, so I passed the exam.

(5) Therefore: 表示因果关系，引导结论。

例句：The weather is bad, therefore we have to cancel the picnic.

(6) However: 表示转折，引出与前面相反的内容。

例句：She is very intelligent. However, she lacks confidence.

过渡词

(1) Firstly/First of all: 表示首先。

例句：Firstly, we need to understand the basics of the topic.

(2) Secondly: 表示其次。

例句：Secondly, we need to consider the possible outcomes.

(3) Furthermore: 表示进一步地。

例句：Furthermore, we need to take into account the potential risks.

(4) Moreover: 表示另外，此外。

例句：Moreover, we need to think about the long-term effects.

(5) In addition: 表示补充信息。

例句：In addition, we need to discuss the financial aspects.

常用句型

(1) It is well known that…: 表示一个广为人知的事实。

例句：It is well known that smoking is bad for our health.

(2) There is no doubt that…: 表示毫无疑问的事实。

例句：There is no doubt that technology has changed our lives.

(3) In conclusion: 表示总结论。

例句：In conclusion, we can see that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

(4) As a result: 表示结果。

例句：The company cut costs, as a result, many employees lost their jobs.

(5) On the one hand, on the other hand: 表示对比或两种不同观点。

例句：On the one hand, the new policy benefits the environment. On the other hand, it may harm the economy.

Mindmap解析

写作-常用连接词最先出现在Clarissa Study。

1. first of all 首先

2. in addition 此外

3. furthermore 此外，而且

4. moreover 此外，而且

5. however 然而

6. therefore 因此

7. consequently 结果

8. on the other hand 另一方面

9. for example 例如

10. in conclusion 最后

常用句型

1. It is important to…：It is important to eat a balanced diet in order to maintain good health.

2. One of the advantages/disadvantages is…：One of the advantages of living in the city is that there are more job opportunities.

3. From my point of view…：From my point of view, studying abroad can broaden one’s horizons and improve language skills.

4. In my opinion…：In my opinion, technology has greatly improved our lives in many ways.

5. According to the statistics…：According to the statistics, the unemployment rate has decreased in the past year.

6. As we all know…：As we all know, exercise is an important part of a healthy lifestyle.

7. Taking everything into consideration…：Taking everything into consideration, I believe that it is important to take care of the environment.

8. In summary…：In summary, the main points of the essay are…

9. In conclusion…：In conclusion, it is clear that education plays a crucial role in a person’s success.

10. To sum up…：To sum up, the article highlights the importance of communication in the workplace.

11. It goes without saying that…：毫无疑问，…：It goes without saying that exercise is important for our health.

12. On the one hand…on the other hand：一方面…另一方面…：On the one hand, studying abroad can broaden one’s horizons. On the other hand, it can be expensive.

13. 善用复合句：复合句指的是多个分句连接在一起形成的句子，这些分句之间有着复杂的关系，如因果、条件、对比、让步等，使用复合句能够使文章更加丰富、流畅，以下是几种常见的复合句和例句：
1) 因果关系复合句
– Since he was too tired, he decided to take a nap. （因为他太累了，所以他决定小睡一会儿。）
– As the weather was bad, we had to cancel our trip. （由于天气不好，我们不得不取消旅行。）
2) 条件关系复合句
– If you work hard, you will achieve your goal. （如果你努力工作，你将会取得成功。）
– Unless you finish your homework, you can’t go out to play. （除非你完成作业，否则你不能出去玩。）
3) 对比关系复合句
– Although she is young, she is very talented. （虽然她还很年轻，但她非常有天赋。）
– While he enjoys reading, his brother prefers watching TV. （虽然他喜欢读书，但他的弟弟更喜欢看电视。）
4) 让步关系复合句
– Even though it was raining heavily, we still had a great time at the party. （尽管下着大雨，但我们在聚会上仍然玩得很开心。）
– Though he is not very good at math, he managed to pass the exam. （尽管他不擅长数学，但他还是通过了考试。）

使用这些复合句可以更灵活地表达自己的观点，使文章更有深度和连贯性。

Mindmap解析

写作常用句型-复合句用起来！最先出现在Clarissa Study。